Date: 07/15/2008 11:09 AM Title: Chapter 1
it's really a great story. good job. i love it.




[Report This]Date: 06/07/2007 11:21 PM Title: Chapter 1
I recently came across a rec for this story so I re-read it and decided I should review here since the story really ougt to have more than no reviews.
It's really a wonderful story and, like some of your others, could be much longer to tell the same tale and it wouldn't be too much, at least if you wrote it.
I liked the juxtaposition at the start of Hermione's attitude compared to carefree Ron at the party. The emotions all seemed spot on.
<i>He paced around her small kitchen. “Were you planning on telling me about this, or was it going to be another one of your secrets?”</i>
That line, in particular, was really good. Just a little hint of problems they've had in canon, but it was nice that it wasn't some huge deal. Leaving the end open was a great touch as well.