Date: 10/03/2011 08:53 AM Title: Prologue: Wills and Fates Do So Contrary Run
I absolutely love this story!! I haven't been able to out it down! But it's so sad that I have read to the end, and to a really good point in the story, only to find out at it hasn't been updated in years :(
Date: 08/20/2007 07:50 PM Title: Prologue: Wills and Fates Do So Contrary Run
Oh, for . . . I can't figure out how to respond to your response, so I'm just posting another review.
First of all, thanks for responding. Second, what you said about the ambiguity being intentional - I totally get that. I do the same thing in my own writing. Glad to have picked up on it - I am certainly thinking about it! So in that case, good job. It worked. :)
I also agree with you about fanfic being a great training ground - I am using it for the same reason. I just found out about it about a month ago and wrote my first piece, which is currently in the hands of a beta. (I'm not entirely sure what that means; I'm pretty sure it doesn't have anything to do with Blade Runner, but I suppose I could be wrong.)
It is strange working with someone else's characters, but it's also somewhat of a relief, as I can assume a certain amount of "reader knowledge" and I don't have to craft everything from scratch. I notice, however, that you do have to add something of your own - the ones I've read that don't add some new dimension to the characters aren't as interesting.
And yes, telling my reader "Lily didn't like the little apartment they were forced to stay in" pretty much kills any reader dead. What else do you write that you're using this as a training ground?
Now I'm going to devour the new chapters. Crunch, snap, munch.
Date: 08/12/2007 01:02 AM Title: This Too Shall Pass
This is fantastic. I can't believe how many ties you have with the Rowling universe. I loved tying your story together with the information we get from her books. My only criticism is that there are several times when you are too criptic, when I was not quite able to draw a conclusion I am sure I was supposed to draw (for instance, is Remus supposed to be in love with Lily, and that's why everyone reacted the way they did when she asked him to give her away? Or is that a reaction to the fact that he is a werewolf and Lily is not aware of how werewolves are perceived in the wizarding world? Or what?). There were also a few times when you referred back to something characters had done previously but didn't remind the reader enough for me to remember what had occurred. Overall, though, this is an impressive piece of writing. I want more, more, more! What happens next!!??!!?!
Author's Response: Well, you'll be happy to know I've just posted the next three chapters - and I fully intend to bring this fic right to the very close. As for Remus, well...you're quite right, I didn't give you enough information there to really explain peoples' reactions. It's probably not very helpful of me to say this, but...that was on purpose. I raised that issue precisely because I wanted the reader to stop and think about Remus and what he is doing at this point in time. I know it must be maddening to hear 'it's unclear because I want it to be unclear.' I want the reader to be looking at Remus and trying to figure him out throughout the story - which is why I send up those red flags. It's my way of saying 'pay attention.' I'm not sure what the other 'cryptic' things are Im afraid (it's so long since I worked on those chapters), but I suspect part of it is because the story is entirely filtered through Lily's consciousness (something I struggled with at times). Usually I prefer to shift between two or three different perspectives - useful in case such as this, where ever so often there was information, or interactions between characters, that I really wanted to convey to the reader, but which Lily simply couldn't know. In the end I decided to stick to Lily's narrative voice, which...has its benefits, as well as its drawbacks, I hope.
Date: 08/22/2006 01:43 AM Title: This Too Shall Pass
So I just found this site randomly... but I'm SO glad I did! This story is absolutely amazing. I couldn't stop reading it, and I was absolutely heartbroken when I reached the end of chapter 13 because I couldn't just click 'next' and read on! I REALLY hope you update often or at least soon, and I can't wait to see where you take this story... you've set up the characters so well. I've read a lot of Lily/James stories, and I've NEVER seen one that portrays Peter as such a genuine character. It's just so incredibly realistic I couldn't help but continue to read it! You've done a fantastic job so far, and I hope you don't stop now!