Date: 08/19/2008 12:01 PM Title: After Eden
I really enjoyed the dialogue you write; I really got a sense of each person and where they were coming from. I found it hard to picture Draco being so sensitive, but then you explained the progression fairly well. Perhaps if we'd seen more of this progression, rather than just having it be told...
Anyway, I still absolutely enjoyed the tale, and thank you very much for sharing your gift of writing! One of the batter ones I've read in ages!
Date: 05/28/2008 12:52 PM Title: After Eden
I just wanted to write a few words about what I really liked about this story. I’ve read a lot of Harry/Draco lately, and I love the ones where they are so ATTRACTIVE, they can’t stay AWAY from each other, but this story was something more. I loved the way the whole plot set up a believable friendship & growing into relationship over time. They have history, they have backstory, they have friends & other connections that gradually come out (Teddy, Andromeda, Dean, Seamus, etc). They have reasons to be together and have future lives in common, like the philanthropy.
I liked the way Ginny bossed Harry into consulting with Draco. I loved how Ron found Harry & Draco together & then gloated about how he knew about it before Hermione & how much she would hate that! I loved that Harry was resistant & stubborn, but eventually admitted how Draco challenged & pushed him. I learned what a pangram is. I liked that Harry’s injury & the possible effect on his magic was very believable. The Hogwarts painting was tremendous. I loved the way Draco, obviously interested in Harry, makes him work to court him in the end.
Loved this turning point:
"Expelliarmus!" Draco shouted unexpectedly.
Harry was thrown back as his wand flew from his hand. Draco lunged forward and tackled him to the floor. He straddled Harry's thighs and pressed his wand into Harry's throat.
"Now tell me in what universe should I be able to do that?" Draco asked through labored breaths.
-----------------It was very believable, and the relationships weren’t perfect, like real life. You did a tremendous job with this fic & every Harry/Draco fan should read it.
For me, reviews/comments are like candy. Instant gratification that makes me all smiley about the work I did. This review is like gourmet chocolate rasberry cheesecake with home-made whipped cream and served with a fine freshly ground espresso . Thank you! It's thrilling when someone connects with a story like you hope they will:D