Date: 09/16/2009 09:55 AM Title: Chapter 1
That was truly beautiful, sweetie. It really gave the reader a chance to understand more about Snape. It was well written, flowed well, and had very few grammatical mistakes (however, you did not place speech marks at the end of Lily's speech when she said "I knew you weren't listening! And you honestly call yourself my friend!"
Thank you very much for sharing!