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Strangers on a Train Platform by EmpressAimee Rated: GP - General Public starstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 4]
Summary: Lily Potter faces her first year at Hogwarts, living up to her Grandmother's name, and a cousin she has never met before.
Categories: Remains of the Day > Eternity
Characters: Albus Severus Potter, Dudley Dursley, Ginny Weasley, Harry Potter, Hermione Granger, Hugo Weasley, James (younger) Potter, Lily Potter, Ron Weasley, Rose Weasley
Genres: General
Time Period: Next Generation
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 4377 Read Count: 1325
[Report This] Published: 01/29/2008 Updated: 02/10/2008
Reviewer: Lucius_Vorenus Signed
Date: 02/10/2008 Title: Chapter 1: Strangers on a Train Platform

Nice and new point of view for a fanfic. Poor Dudley, having to loose his wife and unborn child like that. Hopefully he will find comfort in his new found friends

Please do continue on this level of story telling and let us enjoy your story as it unfolds.

Rose's Petals by tjs_whatnot Rated: GP - General Public [Reviews - 5]
Summary: Moments after her birth, Rose's magic inspires her parents...
Categories: Remains of the Day > Eternity
Characters: Hermione Granger, Ron Weasley, Rose Weasley
Genres: Fluff
Time Period: Post-War
Warnings: Contains Spoilers for DH
Challenges: Monthly Challenge: (2008-04) Rebirth Challenge
Challenges: Monthly Challenge: (2008-04) Rebirth Challenge
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 749 Read Count: 1184
[Report This] Published: 04/22/2008 Updated: 04/22/2008
Reviewer: Lucius_Vorenus Signed
Date: 04/22/2008 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Lovely short story true to the characters of Ron and Hermione.

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

The Portrait by avidbeader Rated: GP - General Public starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 4]
Summary: Harry asks Dean for a favor. AU, set during sixth year.
Categories: Hallowed Halls > Vacant Rooms
Characters: Dean Thomas, Harry Potter, Hermione Granger
Genres: Fluff, Romance
Time Period: Voldemort's Second War
Warnings: Alternate Universe
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1574 Read Count: 954
[Report This] Published: 06/08/2008 Updated: 06/08/2008
Reviewer: Lucius_Vorenus Signed
Date: 06/10/2008 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Nice and well written story, very much in character with Harry, Hermione and Dean.

A fine chance to witness Dean Thomas at work, for he is Gryffindor's resident artist.

Hope to read more from you. 



Author's Response: Thank you very much for taking the time to leave a few comments, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Redemption by Ozma_katiebell Rated: MT - Mature Themes starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 4]
Summary: Draco discovers that redemption can be found in the oddest places.
Categories: Remains of the Day > Eternity
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Luna Lovegood
Genres: Angst, Romance
Time Period: Post-War
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 2780 Read Count: 347
[Report This] Published: 12/18/2008 Updated: 12/18/2008
Reviewer: Lucius_Vorenus Signed
Date: 12/19/2008 Title: Chapter 1: Ashes

Good story, unusual but quite convincing, nevertheless.

Keep writing!

This Mortal Coil by KariAnn1222 Rated: RT - Restricted Themes [Reviews - 7]
Summary: Rose Weasley is inarguably a brilliant mind, but what happens when one of her experiments goes wrong? What was intended to be a journey into alternate realities mistakenly transports her back through time, to during the war before her birth, dragging her longtime rival/frenemy Scorpius Malfoy along with her. Will Rose and Scorpius be able to find a way home without having an adverse effect on the timeline?
Categories: The Broomshed > Self Pleasure, The Broomshed > Erotic Couplings
Characters: Rose Weasley, Scorpius Malfoy
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, Erotica, Romance
Time Period: Next Generation
Warnings: Contains Spoilers for DH, Masturbation, Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 6400 Read Count: 1765
[Report This] Published: 03/01/2011 Updated: 03/02/2011
Reviewer: Lucius_Vorenus Signed
Date: 03/06/2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One: Games

Nice start, keep writing !!!

I enjoy reading of empowered female characters, brilliant, strong willed, stuborn and not be be bossed around or toyed with.

I always think of Rose as having more of Ron's character (and consquently Hugo as more of Hermione's). Rose=Ron; Hugo=Hermione. We know from canon Rose is as bright as her mother and with Ron's better character traits she shoud be irresistible to an intellectual like Scorpius (if you intent to write him that way).

Scorpius is a prat but he will come round as soon as he is dragged along Rose in that adventure you are planning. They will need each other and seem to complement each other much like Ron and Hermione.

I often imagine the older Draco as being the type of guy that wants to get laid with all the girls, at least those belonging to Slytherin house. Unfortunately canon has very little of Draco other than what we get from Harry. So perhaps your Scorpius is a lot like his father is this respect?

I am definitely looking out for more from you ...

 

The One Who Loves You The Most by EruditeWitch Rated: MT - Mature Themes starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 6]
Summary: Ron struggles with fatherhood and raising a daughter while Rose struggles with demons no young woman should have to face in this chronicle of Ron and Rose’s relationship.
Categories: Remains of the Day > Leaving Feast
Characters: Hermione Granger, Ron Weasley, Rose Weasley
Genres: Angst, Drama, General
Time Period: Next Generation
Warnings: Contains Spoilers for DH, Strong Language
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 17309 Read Count: 818
[Report This] Published: 07/09/2011 Updated: 07/09/2011
Reviewer: Lucius_Vorenus Signed
Date: 07/18/2011 Title: Chapter 1: The One Who Loves You The Most

Really well written story, and quite touching too.

Thanks for this wonderful read.

Strangers at Drakeshaugh by Northumbrian Rated: GP - General Public starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 15]
Summary:

The locals in a sleepy corner of the Cheviot Hills are surprised to discover that they have new neighbours.

Who are the strangers at Drakeshaugh?


Brilliant banner by Nadia (That really is the Drakestone)


Categories: Remains of the Day > Eternity
Characters: Albus Severus Potter, Ginny Weasley, Harry Potter, James (younger) Potter, Lily Potter, OFC, OMC
Genres: Comedy, Drama, Fluff, General, Mystery, Romance
Time Period: Post-War
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 21 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 87259 Read Count: 9720
[Report This] Published: 01/27/2012 Updated: 03/22/2014
Reviewer: Lucius_Vorenus Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 06/14/2012 Title: Chapter 1: The Drop Off

This has started off as a rather excellent story.
And highly unusual too, your perspective of the Potters through Jacqui's eyes.
I don't think I have come across fan fiction like this before. All canon events are in the past and you can play with Ginny, Harry, Hermione and Ron, their kids and family for at least a couple of years of their lives leading up to the "All was well" of 2019 from the DH Epilogue.

You set the tone very well, so real and believable: proper English language, geography, and many other things make me think you must be British as well. I think history, folklore and some ancient rites and traditions of druidic Britain might follow with the Potters living in Drakeshaugh.

So far I liked all the people you introduced and I am sure the mothering small children stuff comes from your own experience. It provided an excellent bond between the Potters and their Muggle neighbours, something Ginny and Harry surely must have wanted.

Looking forward to the housewarming party and all the surprises, human interaction, discoveries and revelations.

Looking also forward to the crime and suspense you seem to have in store for us.

Spin your tale well and me and your readers will follow you to the end.

Your story is at the top of my favourite list now and I am looking very much forward to any new chapters.

Keep writing, JKR will be proud of you for your story is truely unique.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review.

All of my stories take place at various points on one, increasingly complicated timeline. This particular tale takes place in late 2009, James is almost five, and the Battle is eleven years in the past. JKR left a huge gap for me to play in, and that's what I'm doing.

Not only am I Britich, but the places are lreal, and not far from me. Alwinton, Harbottle and the Drake Stone all exist, although I've had to reorganise the geography a little to fit Drakeshaugh into the landscape.

The mothering stuff isn't from experience, fathering, however, is a different matter :-)  Schoolgate friendships are funny things, you can't choose your kids' friends for them. I hope that I've explained why Harry and Ginny are doing what they are doing in the story.

The housewarming party is being written, but it's still some way off. The crime and suspense will play a bigger role too, though not for some time.

Thanks again for the review, and the kind words.

-N-

Owl Post by Northumbrian Rated: GP - General Public starstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 1]
Summary:

Some letters are mundane: generic form letters which arrive with monotonous regularity. Other letters are life changing.

Some letters can be both.


Categories: Remains of the Day > Leaving Feast
Characters: Albus Severus Potter, Ginny Weasley, Harry Potter, James (younger) Potter, Lily Potter
Genres: Comedy, Drama, Fluff, General
Time Period: Post-War
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2319 Read Count: 348
[Report This] Published: 02/28/2012 Updated: 02/28/2012
Reviewer: Lucius_Vorenus Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: 02/28/2012 Title: Chapter 1: Owl Post

Nice short story, well done.

What is that magical talent Lily Luna showed?



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review.

What is that magical talent? Good question. She's still young. Perhaps it was no more than accidental magic, perhaps it has something to do with the fact she's called Lily LUNA Potter. I have not decided (yet).

-N-

Renovation by Amythis Rated: MT - Mature Themes starstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 2]
Summary: Part One of "Starting Over" begins the morning after the Battle of Hogwarts, with Hermione deciding to confess her love for both Harry and Ron. The three of them spend the next week beginning to deal with her confession, as well as with the aftermath of the War.
Categories: The Broomshed > Ménage a Trio
Characters: Albus Dumbledore, Angelina Johnson, Arthur Weasley, Bill Weasley, Charlie Weasley, Dean Thomas, Fleur Delacour, Fred Weasley, George Weasley, Ginny Weasley, Harry Potter, Hermione Granger, Luna Lovegood, Minerva McGonagall, Molly Weasley, Neville Longbottom, Percy Weasley, Ron Weasley
Genres: Comedy, Drama, Romance, Trio
Time Period: Post-War
Warnings: Alternate Universe, Contains Spoiler for HBP, Contains Spoilers for DH, EWE, Het, Masturbation, Slash, Strong Language
Series: Starting Over
Chapters: 30 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 49770 Read Count: 7682
[Report This] Published: 10/08/2013 Updated: 11/09/2013
Reviewer: Lucius_Vorenus Signed
Date: 11/02/2013 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One: Trainers

Not a single review or comment after 20 chapters?

Let me be the first then.

I am not really into non-canon pairings in fan fiction, but this story is well wrought and a good reading.

You explained you have all chapters ready beforehand, so this story will most likely be finished also.

With the Potterverse sort of fading out, most stories never reach the final chapters as their (I presume mostly teen age) authors loose interest or simply move on in life.

Thanks for your story.

Author's Response: I just figured everyone was waiting till the end to comment. :-) (I'm finishing up writing the last Part this month, and it'll be about 150 chapters total.) I appreciate you giving this story a chance, even though it's noncanonical, and I'm glad you're enjoying it.