But while Ron fights to save them, Harry and Hermione are lost in a world where the only thing they have is each other...
Categories: The Broomshed > Erotic Couplings
Genres: Drama, Erotica, Romance
Time Period: None
Warnings: Contains Spoiler for HBP, Graphic Violence, Het, Hurt/Comfort, Masturbation, Strong Sexual Content
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 41005 Read Count: 4951
Date: 05/03/2012 Title: Chapter 1: Harry Potter and the Unwinnable Fight
okay. now, fair warning, i am NOT a trio shipper. i suppose it's one thing if all three of them are in love with each other, i could probably accept it.
but that's not the case here (not yet anyway). i'm looking at harry/hermione's apology to ron. was the sex inevitable? probably. but the issue is compounded in this fic.
maybe sex was inevitable, but that doesn't change the betrayal and harry/hermione seem way too eager to get ron to understand and forgive. almost as if they're putting their own feelings before considering his. as ron says, they knew what they were doing was wrong. them loving each otheror them thinking they were stuck there doesn't make it right in the slightest. inevitable, but not right.
and then we get to the love thing. this...i don't know if it makes it better or worse. because a part of me almost does believe two people stuck together like that would inevitably fall in love. but you know what? i don't see it as a good thing like hermione tells harry. for one, it almost degrades their love. it reminds me almost of stockholm syndrome, that it only could've happened under these crazy circumstances. of cours, if they could've found out some other way, then that makes them even guiltier for starting up in the first place.
but the reason i think it's a bad thing is the end game. okay, maybe not if there's a trio sequel (though what happens to ginny?), but otherwise, yeah. harry has to watch hermione with ron everyday, loving her and not having her. same for hermione & harry. and ron also sees that between them every time they talk or touch or whatever.
i knw the whole 'loved and lost better than never loved at all' thing. but this isn't love lost. this is love with a glass wall in between. i don't see how all of them won't experience the same guilt harry and hermione did while in the other world.
and for all hermione's intelignece, she sounds really, really dumb talking about the virginity stuff. this is actually the one thing i don't get, you being a guy. are there guys who care about getting to break a girl's hymen? yes. but you'd be hard-pressed to find a guy who doesn't care MORE about all the other stuff in sharing a first time. THAT'S what's been denied ron, and what hermione and magic will never fix. hell, my heart breaks for ron all over again at the end when he asks hermione the names. she's going to do the EXACT SAME THING she did with harry. and they will both know it. that's what's so fucked up.
okay i'm probably sounding like i'm complaining, and i'm sorry because this is very powerful story. so let me make that clear. but i did want to bitch slap hermione when she told ron she'd never have another man if ron didn't want her. she made it 24 days. she's a nut if she thinks she can go FOREVER, especilly now, knowing what it's like.
and the forgiveness happens way too fast. for one, i don't believe ron couldn't handle hearing about h/hr in that detailed a maner from harry. and that shared minds thing just seems way too convenient in speeding up the recovery process. it doesn't even give ron the chance to be upset which he NEEDS to be. we deal with weeks of harry and hermione's torment and ron gets about 10 paragraphs?
and finally, why does ron have to be with hermione if he loves her? harry isn't (not yet), so why does ron have to? can't he love her from afar?
i guess i just hate that ron is always the one who gets shafted in pretty much any fic that doesn't stick exactly to canon. in harry/hermione, ron always gets thrown over. hermione gets two men's love and ron doesn't even get hermione all to himself. i do love the reality of life being unfair, but, seriously, it's always more unfair to RON than anyone else.
someone needs to write a fic where harry has a sister that ron can bang.
Wow! This is a HUGE, deep, meaty review, and I really appreciate you taking the time and putting in the thought to offer it.
How you feel is how you feel; there's not much I can do about that. That said there are a couple of specific points you bring up that I do want to address.
First, I really want to emphasize that there's a difference between Ron have grown and matured enough to ba able to recognize that he still loves them both even while he's overwhelmed by their betrayal of him, and forgiving them. He's only starting, in the epilogue, to really forgive, and even tghereafter, it's going to be a long, slow process. The fact that he can put aside his rage and do what's right, including admitting that, through his rage, he still loves his friend, doesn't mean that the rage is all over with, and I certainly tried to protray that.
If I ever get to writing it, there'll be a sequel called "Slouching Toward Forgiveness" that will cover more of that.
The significance of the hymen thing isn't that men give a particular damn about it one way or another. It's a symbolic pledge. What's important isn't really tearing flesh and a bit of blood: it's Hermione's commitment to Ron. It's her acknowledgment that she wronged him, and is placing herself in his hands.
Likewise, I don't think that what Harry and Hermione do is so much apologize -- although they clearly do express their regret for betraying and hurting Ron -- as simply give him what he was asking for: the reality of what they experienced. They don't offer any excuses, they don't offer any justifications. They just provide him with the truth of what happened.
Lastly, I don't feel that Ron gets shafted. Ron dedicates himself to bringing his best friend and the woman he loves back, and he achieves that. In the process, he grows and matures as a person, and while he still has problems, he builds himself a context in which to work through and solve them, slowly, with a lot of hard work, as it should be, but with his friends, who have always been, even when they betrayed him, devoted to him, and deeply loving him. A lot of people go their whole lives with a lot less.
Categories: The Broomshed > Ménage a Trio
Characters: Harry Potter, Hermione Granger, Ron Weasley
Genres: Erotica, Trio
Time Period: Post-War
Warnings: FemSlash, Het, Strong Sexual Content, Threesome
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2421 Read Count: 3440
Date: 11/01/2012 Title: Chapter 1: In Celebration
Very hot. Except...why the hell does Ron just obey Harry? Harry says he needs to fuck and Ron just backs off? C'mon. No guy would do that, and no friend would ask that.