Penname: theelderwyrm [Contact] Real name: Neil
Member Since: 09/25/2007
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Watching Ginny by snitchwitch Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 2]
Summary: Who watches Ginny?
Categories: The Broomshed > Self Pleasure
Characters: Ginny Weasley
Genres: Erotica
Time Period: None
Warnings: Het, Masturbation
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 848 Read Count: 1706
[Report This] Published: 06/06/2006 Updated: 06/06/2006
Reviewer: theelderwyrm Signed
Date: 10/07/2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Nice twist at the end.  Very sexy. 

Book Learning II: Re-Education by ThaliaChaunacy Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 4]
Summary: Hermione enjoys the fruits of Ron's labour.
Categories: The Broomshed > Erotic Couplings
Characters: Hermione Granger, Ron Weasley
Genres: Erotica, Fluff, PWP
Time Period: None
Warnings: Strong Sexual Content
Series: Book Learning
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1115 Read Count: 1942
[Report This] Published: 08/13/2006 Updated: 08/13/2006
Reviewer: theelderwyrm Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 11/26/2007 Title: Chapter 1: Re-Education

I do particularly enjoy this story.  It's a fun read, and very in character for Hermione.  Thank you for taking the time to write it.

The Elder Wyrm



Author's Response: And thank YOU for taking the time to read and review! I'm totes glad I could entertain you. :D:D

"That" Need by TheTrioMakesMeHot Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 174]
Summary: Sometimes people have needs they can't satisfy alone. Sometimes, "that" need requires help from our friends.
Categories: The Broomshed > The Changing Room, The Broomshed > The Ladies Room, The Broomshed > Erotic Couplings
Characters: Hermione Granger, Harry Potter, Ginny Weasley, Ron Weasley
Genres: Erotica, PWP, Romance
Time Period: None
Warnings: FemSlash, Het, Masturbation, Rimming, Slash, Strong Sexual Content, Underage, Voyeurism, Weasleycest
Series: None
Chapters: 16 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 43934 Read Count: 253827
[Report This] Published: 12/30/2006 Updated: 04/23/2007
Reviewer: theelderwyrm Signed
Date: 07/26/2009 Title: Chapter 16: One Lucky Wizard

That was an excellent story.  I'm not much for Rarry, but your chapter organization made it easy to skip around to the parts I did like.  I thought you handle the Ron/Ginny scenes particularly well.  My favorite chapter though was the Hermione/Ginny chapter, very hot- I love it when lust gets the best of good friends and makes them more.

Author's Response: Very glad you enjoyed, and I'm glad my organization strategy worked out for you.  I sort of see this as my "something for everyone" story.

Unexpected Smiles by Hildigunnur Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3]
Summary: It feels like exploring the unknown to be pursuing Pansy Parkinson.
Categories: The Broomshed > The Ladies Room
Characters: Hermione Granger, Pansy Parkinson
Genres: Erotica, Romance
Time Period: None
Warnings: FemSlash, Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2611 Read Count: 1358
[Report This] Published: 05/10/2007 Updated: 05/10/2007
Reviewer: theelderwyrm Signed
Date: 10/28/2007 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

That was a pleasant little interlude.  It would have been nice to see the flirting and encouragement that led to Hermione thinking she could move on to the point of seduction.  I did particularly like the line, 'There were limits and she absolutely didn't want Harry and Ron wanking to the image of her and Pansy Parkinson fucking.'  Very appropriate and added a bit of a glimpse into their group relationship.

The Elder Wyrm 



Author's Response: Your review made me smile. Both because I remember your name from my earlier fandom days and because I'm glad you liked it and offered me a bit of constructive criticism. Thank you.

External Penetration by Argyle_S Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstar [Reviews - 9]
Summary: Harry is having sex with his two best friends. Unfortunately, they know nothing about it.
Categories: The Broomshed > Erotic Couplings
Characters: Hermione Granger, Harry Potter, Ron Weasley
Genres: Darkfic, Drama, Erotica, Romance
Time Period: None
Warnings: Angst, Het, Hurt/Comfort, Non-Con, Strong Language, Strong Sexual Content, Voyeurism
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 5589 Read Count: 4444
[Report This] Published: 06/08/2007 Updated: 06/08/2007
Reviewer: theelderwyrm Signed
Date: 07/08/2014 Title: Chapter 1: External Penetration

That was interesting, and well written. Glad I stumbled across it.

The Missing Pieces by inell Rated: GP - General Public starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 2]
Summary: Now came the fun part: solving the puzzle.
Categories: Crossovers > Movies
Characters: Various
Genres: Fluff
Time Period: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3405 Read Count: 1126
[Report This] Published: 06/09/2007 Updated: 06/09/2007
Reviewer: theelderwyrm Signed
Date: 07/30/2008 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

That was an interesting piece.  It was well written, and created a good scene.  I am curious as to a little more background on the injury, why she's so isolated from her friends, etc. 

I like the open-ended ending.  Not every story needs to have a neat little wrap up. 

Desires by Argyle_S Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 5]
Summary: Past Featured StoryHermione can't stop thinking about what her roommates are doing.
Categories: The Broomshed > Self Pleasure
Characters: Lavender Brown, Hermione Granger, Abraxas Malfoy, Harry Potter, Ginny Weasley, Ron Weasley
Genres: Erotica, PWP
Time Period: None
Warnings: FemSlash, Het, Masturbation, Slash, Strong Language, Strong Sexual Content, Threesome, Voyeurism
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1169 Read Count: 6828
[Report This] Published: 06/12/2007 Updated: 06/12/2007
Reviewer: theelderwyrm Signed
Date: 10/07/2009 Title: Chapter 1: Desires

That was good. The residual desire from being in the presence of others having sex, the wandering thoughts of sex with various partners, and the reveal of the favorite, most forbidden fantasy.  Very well done.

Leaving her Mark by luvscharlie Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 6]
Summary: Ron Weasley's a Keeper; Lavender Brown plans to do just that: keep him.
Categories: The Broomshed > Erotic Couplings
Characters: Lavender Brown, Ron Weasley
Genres: Erotica, Fluff, PWP, Romance
Time Period: Voldemort's Second War
Warnings: Contains Spoiler for HBP, Het, Minor Fluff, Strong Language, Strong Sexual Content, Underage
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3910 Read Count: 1028
[Report This] Published: 06/15/2008 Updated: 06/15/2008
Reviewer: theelderwyrm Signed
Date: 10/07/2009 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

Nice.  I think you may have given Ron a bit much credit in making sure that Lavender got hers.  Teenage boys are notoriously bad on that point unless they've had "guidance".  Ron didn't seem to have much in the way of prior "guidance."  The interaction with Hermione and Lavender was very well done though.

A Hexable Offense by luvscharlie Rated: MT - Mature Themes [Reviews - 4]
Summary: Ron's night is going rather well until Harry ruins it.
Categories: The Broomshed > Drabbles
Characters: Harry Potter, Pansy Parkinson, Ron Weasley
Genres: Drabble, Erotica, PWP
Time Period: Voldemort's Second War
Warnings: Bondage, Het, Love/Hate, Masturbation, Strong Language, Strong Sexual Content, Underage
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 271 Read Count: 2157
[Report This] Published: 12/06/2008 Updated: 12/06/2008
Reviewer: theelderwyrm Signed
Date: 10/07/2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

LOL!!  Nice.

Shattered by Amortentia Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 4]
Summary: Ron and Ginny feel isolated and ostracized after the war. The siblings discover they can trust only each other and explore their forbidden love.
Categories: The Broomshed > Erotic Couplings
Characters: Ginny Weasley, Ron Weasley
Genres: Angst, Drama, Erotica
Time Period: Post-War
Warnings: Angst, Het, Hurt/Comfort, Incest, Rimming, Strong Language, Strong Sexual Content, Weasleycest
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 13281 Read Count: 4281
[Report This] Published: 03/30/2009 Updated: 03/30/2009
Reviewer: theelderwyrm Signed
Date: 09/07/2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I like the way one taboo feeds another feeds another.  Very sexy and very well written.

Author's Response: Thank you!!! I'm getting ready to post another Ron/Ginny.  Not as dark as this one.  It's Ron/Ginny/Pansy actually.  Gald you enjoyed the story!!

The Best of Friends by Amortentia Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 2]
Summary: Ginny, Hermione and Ron's desire to spend the night together is more overwhelming than their trepidations about incest.
Categories: The Broomshed > Erotic Couplings, The Broomshed > More Than Two
Characters: Ginny Weasley, Hermione Granger, Ron Weasley
Genres: Erotica, PWP
Time Period: Voldemort's Second War
Warnings: FemSlash, Het, Incest, Masturbation, Strong Language, Strong Sexual Content, Weasleycest
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 9301 Read Count: 9579
[Report This] Published: 07/07/2009 Updated: 07/07/2009
Reviewer: theelderwyrm Signed
Date: 09/07/2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Nice! Seriously hot.  The back and forth from one character to another every paragraph was a little confusing at first, but it straightened itself out.  I like how you dealt with the taboo, the concern about it but at the same time letting it fuel the passion.

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm pleased you enjoyed the story.  I tried to tame the back and forth as this was originally written as a role play, sorry it still reads as a bit confusing.  I love the Ron/Ginny taboo, and trying to write it so it "works." :)

Love Everlasting by Amortentia Rated: RT - Restricted Themes [Reviews - 3]
Summary: Ginny, Ron and Pansy explore the incestous nature of Purebloods
Categories: The Broomshed > Erotic Couplings, The Broomshed > More Than Two
Characters: Ginny Weasley, Pansy Parkinson, Ron Weasley
Genres: Erotica, PWP, Romance
Time Period: Voldemort's Second War
Warnings: FemSlash, Het, Incest, Masturbation, Strong Language, Strong Sexual Content, Weasleycest
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 8925 Read Count: 8131
[Report This] Published: 09/14/2009 Updated: 09/17/2009
Reviewer: theelderwyrm Signed
Date: 10/03/2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This was good, very hot.

It took me a while to get into the rhythm of the story though.  The mention of the time with Hermione made it feel like a sequel, but with only the most tenuous of connection between them. It might have worked better with Hermione instead of Pansy, especially since it would have given Hermione the opportunitly to fully explore her fascination with them and the thrill of the tabboo.

However, Ron/Pansy is my second favorite ship, so I really liked it from that point.  With it written the way it is, I think it could have benefitted from a little more exposition by Pansy at the beginning.  Her thinking about her history with Ron, if she knew about the two of them with Hermione, and her talking about her own attraction to the siblings having sex other than, "it's not uncommon among Purebloods."

Again, good story and I look forward to seeing what you do with these characters in the future.



Author's Response: Thank you for your review!  You're right, this is a sequel, of sorts, to the story "The Best of Friends" which is Ron/Hermione/Ginny, in which Hr does expore her fascination with them and the taboo.  I agree that the story's rhythm is a bit akward.  This, and "Best of Friends" were originally a role play, and I tried to make them "flow" more as a story.  And yeah for Ron/Pansy! :)

Predicament by Wizzardt Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstar [Reviews - 4]
Summary: An accident leads Hermione on an erotic adventure with Ginny that she never dreamed of. Hermione/Ginny, Sex Magic, Futanari.
Categories: The Broomshed > The Ladies Room
Characters: Hermione Granger
Genres: PWP
Time Period: Post-War
Warnings: Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 5 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 20635 Read Count: 39682
[Report This] Published: 05/16/2011 Updated: 05/23/2011
Reviewer: theelderwyrm Signed
Date: 11/20/2013 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

That was a interesting little romp. In the first chapter the writing felt a bit pedestrian. However, as the story went on the language flowed more smoothly and the pacing improved. I am glad you took the time to write it, and even more pleased that I got to read it. Thanks.

Dream a Little Dream of Me... by Nutmeg44 Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3]
Summary: Maybe dreams can come true…
Categories: The Broomshed > Erotic Couplings
Characters: Pansy Parkinson, Ron Weasley
Genres: Erotica, Romance
Time Period: Voldemort's Second War
Warnings: Het, Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1767 Read Count: 1519
[Report This] Published: 07/09/2013 Updated: 07/09/2013
Reviewer: theelderwyrm Signed
Date: 06/28/2014 Title: Chapter 1: Dream a Little Dream of Me

That was interesting little bit of naughtiness. I like R/P fics, and I thought your approach to it was interesting since it by-passed all of the normal "how do we get to the shagging" part that most RP stories have to go through. Good job.

Author's Response: Thank you. I'm glad you like it. I figure Ron wouldn't question a dream because people have weird dreams all the time. He doesn't need to know that Pansy is the one controlling his dreams...yet.

Resettlement by Amythis Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 2]
Summary: In Part Five of "Starting Over," Hermione moves in with Harry, and Ron plans to join them, although the property dispute is not yet resolved.
Categories: The Broomshed > Ménage a Trio
Characters: Bill Weasley, Fred Weasley, George Weasley, Ginny Weasley, Harry Potter, Hermione Granger, Percy Weasley, Ron Weasley
Genres: Comedy, Drama, Erotica, Fluff, Romance, Trio
Time Period: Post-War
Warnings: Alternate Universe, Contains Spoiler for HBP, Contains Spoilers for DH, EWE, Het, Slash, Strong Language, Strong Sexual Content, Threesome
Series: Starting Over
Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 38275 Read Count: 4045
[Report This] Published: 05/06/2014 Updated: 06/17/2014
Reviewer: theelderwyrm Signed
Date: 06/18/2014 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One Hundred and Twenty-Three: Roundabout

I'm glad to see you finished it, though the ending felt a bit rushed. There were several things I liked about the entire arc. I liked how you handled Harry's reaction to Hermione's revelation, how he fell in love with them as a couple. I like how you handled Australia, though I thought it could have used a bit more tension before forgiveness. I was glad to see her father confront her about "who are you to make decisions for us?"
I really liked your Luna.
I was very happy with the way you handled the revelation to Ginny. I had been very worried you were going to softball it given the way you had handled some other aspects, but I thought Ginny's anger level was appropriate, and her reaction afterward was very Weasely. Nice touch.
I think the property dispute should have been introduced sooner so that it could provide more tension over a longer period, but I did like the way it was resolved.
Some of the sex scenes needed a second set of eyes. I had to read the first intercourse a couple of times to understand what they were doing.
Finally, I thought you did a nice job of bridging into the known info for what happens after Hogwarts. Good work weaving all that together.
I hope to see more stories from you.

Author's Response: Thank you for your criticism, which I can't particularly disagree with. I wrote this story (last year) without knowing where it was going, and the whole property dispute popped up out of nowhere, past the midpoint of what I had already decided would be 150 chapters. (So then I had to get it resolved by the time Ron moved in.) I'm very pleased you think I succeeded with Luna, because she's one of the trickiest characters to capture. This story aside, I don't write as much fanfic as I used to, but I may get inspired again. Thanks again for taking the time to comment.