Date: 08/20/2010 06:33 PM Title: Chapter 1
May I suggest more chapters? I don't consider myself an expert, but this is more than a plot bunny, there are so many beautiful, ethereal, enticing directions you could take this. My only criticism is that it feels unfinished.
Author's Response: Hm. I can see what you mean, but I'm not entirely sure it would be a good idea. I've often found that expanding on a one-shot can be a bad idea. Nevertheless, I might try after I get the upmteen other stories out of the way. :) Thanks for the review!