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Façade by simons_flower Rated: MT - Mature Themes starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 3]
Summary: Hermione had always believed she could stand up for herself. She’d done it often enough as a student in dealing with Harry and Ron. Why couldn’t she do it now?
Categories: Remains of the Day > Leaving Feast
Characters: Hermione Granger, OMC, Harry Potter, Ron Weasley
Genres: Trio, Mystery, Drama
Time Period: None
Warnings: Angst, Hurt/Comfort, Violence
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3302 Read Count: 1092
[Report This] Published: 10/18/2005 Updated: 10/18/2005
Reviewer: Minisinoo Signed
Date: 06/10/2008 Title: Chapter 1: Façade

*snerk*  A difficult subject, indeed.  But I admit, I thoroughly enjoyed the end.

Author's Response: Thank you!  I'm glad you liked it.  Personally, I'm fond of the image of Harry and Ron all in black :)

A Light in the Night by sesptwd Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1]
Summary: Harry battles with his sexuality. One night, he sees a light in the woods which leads to a definite realization.
Categories: Hallowed Halls > From Diagon Alley to Hogwarts
Characters: Cedric Diggory, Harry Potter
Genres: Erotica
Time Period: None
Warnings: Masturbation, RST, Slash, Voyeurism
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2615 Read Count: 1558
[Report This] Published: 07/08/2006 Updated: 07/08/2006
Reviewer: Minisinoo Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 10/19/2007 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This is cute -- and very hot!  Although Cedric was actually in 6th year, not 7th, but that's a minor nitpick.  I enjoyed it.

Harry Potter and the Unbreakable Bond by Leviathan Rated: RT - Restricted Themes starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 203]
Summary: Past Featured StoryWhen Hermione uses ancient magic to save Harry and Ron, the trio's lives are changed - forever! 

AU, Sixth-year.
Categories: The Broomshed > Ménage a Trio
Characters: Harry Potter, Hermione Granger, Ron Weasley
Genres: Action/Adventure, Comedy, Drama, Erotica, Fluff, Horror, Romance, Trio
Time Period: Voldemort's Second War
Warnings: Alternate Universe, Contains Spoiler for HBP, Contains Spoilers for DH, Graphic Violence, Het, Hurt/Comfort, Masturbation, Slash, Strong Language, Strong Sexual Content, Threesome, Underage
Series: None
Chapters: 27 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 165896 Read Count: 143472
[Report This] Published: 10/14/2006 Updated: 04/08/2010
Reviewer: Minisinoo Signed
Date: 12/06/2007 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue: A Butterfly Flaps Its Wings In China

*sigh*  This came recommended to me and looked so promising.  I really quite liked the initial section, but then I got to the very second scene with Hermione reading about "Peloponnesian monarchs." And while this may sound like the most petty critique ever, it's important because this is how you throw readers out of your story.  I almost never leave negative reviews, and I'm tempted to apologize for doing so, but I stand behind the rebuke I'm giving (which is why I'm using my name, not anonymous).

Do you know where the Peloponnese is -- more importantly WHAT it is?  I suspect not.  The Peloponnese is the very large almost-island off the SW of the Greek peninsula and has historically belonged to Greece.  It hasn't had "monarchs" since the Mycenaean Bronze Age unless you count the Spartan kings (in which case I assume you'd have said "Spartan kings" as Sparta had a unique, peculiar mixed constitution).  Ancient Greece had independent city-states ... among the more famous in the Peloponnese were Sparta, Corinth, Argos, Tiryns and Ellis near ancient Olympia (site of the Greek Olympics).  These city-states were largely oligarchies, with later a few democracies.  No "monarchies."  It all eventually fell to Rome, then was bequeathed to Byzantium -- who had emperors, not kings -- then to the Ottoman Empire, who had sultans over the area.  And if Greece had a king for a while directly after Greek Independence in the mid 1800s, it was just one at a time, and he was king of Greece, not the Peloponnese.

We won't even go into the fact the Greeks had contractual marriages, not marriage "vows" until Greek Orthodoxy.  Nor the fact that any spells they cast would surely have been in GREEK, not Latin.

What's the point of all this?  It looks like you  blindly pointed your finger at a map and used whatever landmass it landed on without looking it up.  And given the ease of narrative style in the writing up to that point, I don't think you're an inexperienced writer. But such an easily avoidable mistake suggests you didn't care enough to check your facts, which in turn means I don't care enough to finish your story, however highly recommended.

And I'm frustrated because after the first scene, I was prepared to like it.  I thought it a very clever opening.  Then I hit that huge historical blunder, which told me this is "just fanfic" to you, not worth your time to double-check.  I prefer to read fiction, not "just fanfic."

And that's how you throw a reader out of your story -- fail to check your facts when it would be really easy to do so.

Author's Response: In fact I did research Peloponnese before writing that scene. While my research was not as complete as yours, you're clearly overlooking two crucial points.

The first is the word "ancient." When I used that word, I meant it. Not merely historical but ancient, dating back to the days of legend, of giants and gods. While I don't have a calender of dates, I can tell you that the Regimagi, though not directly related in any way, were approximate contemporaries, give or take a few centuries, of the Roman Empire.

The second is in the seperation Wizarding and Muggle cultures. The Muggle histories you have read will tell you nothing of the Regimagi of ancient Peloponnese, because those histories don't include anything of the Wizarding world. The last Regimagus of that vast island could have been deposed last Tuesday, and we'd never know of it.

So rest assured, in the days before Caesar ruled the Roman Empire, the magical population of Peloponnese were ruled by Wizard-Kings, whose extraordinarily powerful magic has mostly been lost to modern wizard-kind.

In short, you did not encounter a historical blunder, huge or otherwise. You assumed that Muggle history applied to wizards, which is a mystifying mistake.